You still got this weird thing with jump cuts. I think it a fetish of yours, and there nothing wrong with it but. With jump cut you need to implied that somethinh happenen betwen when the scene when we cut to the scene when we jump. otherwise its implied, like in the scene when we come from work to the appartement, that after his last line, he take of his coat, si in his armchair, stake a the floor fo we don`t know hom much time and then suddennly speak. Its just weird and not realistic, if we was in schock you should show it , if its an error, just make in do the supper, somethin to do that its logic, we come from work he`s hungry, and he`s thinkin about what she know about humans...
And you should make speak a little more, the joke at the end was very cute and funny, and give us at leat a piece of character devloppement. You should read book about script writing and cinema, you could be suprise how much it can improve you.
I don`t like that its happening in japan, since you`re not, so it could only be GENERIC JAPAN, but if your story is not serious, and really short, there`s nothin wrong, but it would be very more intersting to place the story in a envirronement that you know very much, that you grow in it, and with a culture that make sense with your characters. I didn`t see anything that make him a japanese, or make Dea some sort of divinity, or ghost that exist in the japanese culture...
Overall its a good atmosphere.
This totally make sense...
No Lord dark helmet, I totaly didn't see you play with dolls again.
Good animation....but very lazy writing....too much thing get in the way for just getting in the story en enjoying it. Like who`s gonna take a bath when he clearly see someone he never see before and got ghost powers ?
I mean, its supposed to be very unpleasant to see a ghost, or maybe he see them every day but that its not explain...getting naked won`t help....or he's a special kind of pervert.
Why do he wait so long to speak to her?
If she don`t know how to play a zelda game....whats`makes her able to play DDR ?
What happen after he see her the first time...did he faint or somethin?
I know its animation, its a lot of work but....when he realise she`s Death....the voice didn`t make believe he was scared, but its the least important...coz he just chill in the sofa....why ins't he jumping backward...if I encounter the angel of death I'll run the fok away ! Or make him a rather stoic character, that problebly fit with the fact that he`s gonna hang around white Death....that's a cool and dark premisse...
Someone who dont give a shit about living encounter a girl who`s Death incarnate and she`s gonna give him back the will to live....to kill him...years after.
Your idea have potential...you didn`t dig it up.
And....when she`s showing her power....that`s not a death power....why not kill somethin, make a plant die, a fly....anything...or showing he`s futur death ! ....no she just open a gate to....a flying Gasper ?
"Why do he wait so long to speak to her?"
Get your ass on work, we want to see your movie in the coming months.
I loved that.
Really good, collorful and fluid dispite your rought style.
In fact the song is by Imogen Heap, the title is correct, frou frou is the album...Please correct it .
Great work, love your style, the feeling, the flow of your drawings. Some say mayby you could spent more time to make the animation more fluid, I think not, keep it harsh as life, it goes with rythm of the song...and thanks for the descovery !
Thank you for another great review! Sounds lovely:) Your Welcome!
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