You still got this weird thing with jump cuts. I think it a fetish of yours, and there nothing wrong with it but. With jump cut you need to implied that somethinh happenen betwen when the scene when we cut to the scene when we jump. otherwise its implied, like in the scene when we come from work to the appartement, that after his last line, he take of his coat, si in his armchair, stake a the floor fo we don`t know hom much time and then suddennly speak. Its just weird and not realistic, if we was in schock you should show it , if its an error, just make in do the supper, somethin to do that its logic, we come from work he`s hungry, and he`s thinkin about what she know about humans...
And you should make speak a little more, the joke at the end was very cute and funny, and give us at leat a piece of character devloppement. You should read book about script writing and cinema, you could be suprise how much it can improve you.
I don`t like that its happening in japan, since you`re not, so it could only be GENERIC JAPAN, but if your story is not serious, and really short, there`s nothin wrong, but it would be very more intersting to place the story in a envirronement that you know very much, that you grow in it, and with a culture that make sense with your characters. I didn`t see anything that make him a japanese, or make Dea some sort of divinity, or ghost that exist in the japanese culture...
Overall its a good atmosphere.